In 38 minutes, my babysitter is coming and I have to prank her. I have sent my sister to buy a black outfit so she will blend in at night.
I am in huge trouble now, and your probably wondering why. I made my sister pretend to kidnap me, and this is what happened.
My babysitter walked in and sat on the couch beside me. I looked out the window and saw someone with a gun and I told her. She looked out the window, grabbed a baseball bat, and told me to to turn the lights off. As soon as she opened the door, a person ran in with a black outfit, and a gun which was actually a fake one. Suddenly, I heard my mom's car pulling on the driveway.
Your story was great but you have a few mistakes like in the last paragraph, in the third sentence you said and told me to to turn of all the lights and I think that does not make sense so instead of that you can say and told me to turn the lights off.
ReplyDeleteThere should be a comma after minutes, in the second sentence of the third paragraph you should change the word her to us because that doe not make sense, and there should be a comma after the word door. GOOD LUCK!!:)
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