My family decided to go to
Ireland for a vacation. When we arrived, I saw a beautiful rocky beach. I told
my parents that I was going to the beach for a while to relax because I was jet
lagged. I was walking and I noticed six green bins. I wondered what they were
all about? As, I walked closer I noticed that they were trash bins. Then, I paid
more attention to the bins and noticed that they were shaking. Suddenly, my
little brother popped up behind one of the bins. I jumped and got to know it
was only a crazy dream.
You should combine your second and third sentences so it says, "....beach, and I told my parents that I was going there to relax for a while. You do not need a ? after about or a comma after as or then. GOOD LUCK!!:)
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