There once was a model named Regina, who was rude, bossy, tall, and had a face that had more plastic than skin on it. She was on every magazine cover, had her own show, and was admired by millions.
She was always making fun of the other models, about how they looked, how they acted, and what company they worked for. Every time she was mean to the models there was a spot on her face which grew every time. She tried a lot of face products, but the spot just grew and grew.
She tried to cover her spot with fancy hats, but nothing worked. Finally, she lost her job due to her ugly face.
In the second paragraph you should write,"...mean to the other models, an ugly spot grew on her usually flawless face." GOOD LUCK!!:)
ReplyDeletetake off the comma after tall on the first sentence and also take of the comma after acted on the second paragraph's first sentence. Also high light but the spots just grew and grew, otherwise a good story good luck :D
ReplyDeleteIf the spot is on her face then a hat would not make sense to cover it so maybe you could say "she tried to cover her spot with different kinds of expensive makeup" but I really like this story, good job and good luck!!!!!!!
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